Difficulty: Medium

Average Score: 62%

In context, which revision would most improve sentence 12? I am aware that what I see as determination, they sometimes see as a lack of realism.

Rationale

Changing 'they' to 'other people' would most improve sentence 12.

This revision clarifies the subject of the sentence, making it more explicit that the speaker is referring to a broader group rather than using the ambiguous pronoun "they." This enhances the overall clarity and understanding of the sentence.

A (Change 'I am aware' to 'I notice'.) YOUR ANSWER

While changing 'I am aware' to 'I notice' could make the sentence feel more immediate, it does not address the ambiguity of the subject 'they.' The term 'notice' does not significantly improve the clarity or meaning of the sentence as a whole.

B (Change 'what I see' to 'the quality that I know'.) YOUR ANSWER

This change introduces unnecessary complexity to the sentence. The phrase 'the quality that I know' is less direct and may obscure the original intention of expressing a personal perception. Retaining 'what I see' keeps the focus clear and relatable.

D (Delete 'sometimes'.) YOUR ANSWER

Deleting 'sometimes' may simplify the sentence but does not enhance clarity. The term 'some' is crucial as it indicates that not everyone shares the same perspective. Removing it would lead to a loss of nuance regarding the differing opinions of the people being referenced.

Conclusion

To enhance clarity in sentence 12, specifying 'they' as 'other people' directly identifies the group being discussed. This change eliminates ambiguity and ensures that readers understand the distinction between the speaker's view and that of others. The other options, while they may alter the sentence, do not improve clarity or understanding in the same effective manner.

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